Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers is having their first challenge this week. It will be each Wednesday. 100-150 words more or less. I’ll put the link to this week’s stories at the end of this piece. Drop by to read or write or both 🙂 Thanks to PJ for hosting this challenge. Here’s the photo and my story (163 words):
We were seated in the balcony cafe that overlooked the book store. My book signing was set to begin in just about an hour.
You seemed nervous and more anxious than usual. “I’m not sticking around for the book signing,” you said.
“What do you mean? Wait. What?” What does he mean by he’s not staying?
“There’s a lot about this book that isn’t true, Charlene.” Poor Ted. He really did seem anxious.
“It’s a fiction novel, Ted.”
“But some of it is true. I don’t cope well with truths and lies all mingled up together.”
“You didn’t seem to mind it very much when you were reading every word Anais Nin ever wrote.” I stood up. I sat back down again.
“Well everyone knows she exaggerated her life,” you said.
“And?
“And it’ll shock people to find that out about you. That’s all. And I can’t be here when that happens.”
“Which part scares you most, Ted?”
“The fish story.”
“But that’s true, right?”
Ellespeth
** find other stories here **
photo prompt copyright Dawn M. Miller
That was a good giggle. lol the best writers write what they know. The I said/ you said is confusing though. I would suggest keeping the ‘I said’ but replacing the ‘you said’s’ with the characters name.
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I’m happy for the giggle. I just read the piece again and I see your point about the “I said/you said’ I’ll work on that and let you know when it’s done. Thanks for reading my work, Stephanie. I certainly do appreciate your feedback.
I’m just settling into the week end and getting ready to read a few more entries. I try to read a few each day. I hope you’ll have a post.
Ellespeth
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I really like the banter between your two MCs, it feels real and flows well. And my favorite line is when the guy says he doesn’t like when truths and lies mingle. The only thing I wasn’t sure on was their relationship. They could’ve been lovers, they could’ve been friends. If they were really close I think he might’ve voiced his discomfort with her much sooner. Great Job!
Love for your feedback on mine: https://romancedonewrite.wordpress.com/2015/02/20/flashfictionfriday-vol-1-the-book-tour/
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Thank you 🙂 Sometimes I enjoy writing dialogue. To me, it’s just poetry in quotation marks. I’m glad to hear it flows for the reader. The ‘truths and lies’ part is comical, to me, because it does happen that way, sometimes, for writers.
Your comment about their relationship is interesting. In my head, they’re a couple. But, now that you’ve mentioned it, they could be friends or brother and sister or father and daughter. It’s a small town. Most family and friends will be at the book signing. Some fishing buddy has read the book…maybe.
Thanks for reading my work and for your feedback. I’m just about to begin reading more of the stories now. I’ll look for your entry.
Ellespeth
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I love this! very interesting!
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Thanks! It’s been such a great challenge, hasn’t it?
Ellespeth
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I wonder what the ‘fish story’ was about (apart from the obvious!)
Great little story, had me engaged all the way through!
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It’s either the one that got away of the 10 foot salmon 😛
Thanks for reading my work, Francesca, and for your comments.
Ellespeth
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Great story
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Thanks, Cat…
Ellespeth
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Haha! All the time he is really worried about his own “untruths.” Excellent! I really enjoyed reading this. Your writing is wonderful. Thank you for participating and I hope you will continue.
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Thanks PJ! Some people, eh? Glad you liked this one…
I certainly plan on continuing with this group. It’s a wonderful thing you’re doing.
Ellespeth
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Thank you Ellespeth. Once I got through the hiccups of the first day it has been great! I enjoy writing flash fiction. It is fun and addicting. I thought it would be nice for struggling writers (like me! ha!) to have a challenge of our own. It is very nice when the non struggling writers (like you) want to join us!
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You really have me laughing here. And blushing. I certainly wish I wasn’t a struggling writer. One day we’ll all be able to say ‘we knew each other when’…
I’m glad the hiccups are subsiding. This is a huge undertaking and you’ve carried it off it great style, PJ.
Ellespeth
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Thank you Ellespeth! It was quite a whirlwind that first day! So glad I got through it and things are going smoothly now and may they continue..
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Well one day I will be able to say, I knew her when she blogged on WordPress! LOL!
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Uhoh, the tension here is palpable. I suppose it can be a bit unsettling for those closest to the writer to see her inner and outer lives come together on the page… I love the open ending.
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If I were him, I’d stay. My husband said that’s pretty much what he’d say 😛 Thanks for reading my work and for your comment, Sonya.
Ellespeth
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